DEAR MUM

wow....
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POWERFUL.

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yes... there IS only one word to describe that... and it'a already been said! but I'll repeat it. POWERFUL.

woah... didn't you say somewhere that you weren't good at writing poems???

This was very powerful and written very well. Plus the shocker at the end just causes an incredible dumbstruck kind of reaction. I literally sat in my seat for a minute without moving.

A couple of things though:
- Change "watch" to "watched" in line 22
- In line 21 you should change "very" to "so." It goes along better with the flow.

Looking back through it now, I love the structure of the poem as well; the repitition of anymore and the same general theme for each last line.

Superb.

I love it. There isn't really any else to say.

Definitely a powerful (if depressing) poem...I particularly liked the ending, like Nate said, a real shocker. Makes you do a double take and reread it all over again in a new light. I like the kooky rhyme scheme - it seems a bit awkward at first but I reckon it works. A great poem - well done!

powerfully sad. It is an amazing poem, even if it is depressing. It really triggers a love for humanity.

Its really intesene. I really didn't like the rhyme, though, I thought it made the piece a little less real.

powerful

Such a sad and yes, powerful poem.
It's very nice.

Powerful and sad, theres nothing else you can say.

My main problem was the repetion of 'Mum' couldn't you start a stanza differently? It is powerful, but not as powerful to me. You also have the title all in caps. A big no-no. Overall: This poem has some merit for shock factor and way it's written, just stop repetion of Mum and you have a great poem. Some of the rhyming does seem rather forced though. That's all I can think of. Hmm, it's intresting.

Good luck
VSN

It's powerful, intense, sad, heart-aching.

I liked it. It's nice.

Great job!

Keep writing!