the rise and fall of king xlii

Okay I REALLY like this one. I don't think there's been one I haven't liked, but I really, really enjoyed this one :]

Okay, so yesterday was HECTIC (more than 14 hours of travel by car + plane :']) so I had NO time to write a poem yesterday but I'm making it up by writing two today! This is the first of two; I've already written both so if they're posted REALLY close together, that is why, haha. I really like both of these :] would love to hear thoughts. Enjoy!

This one is a pantoum : D and the other I just posted is a Shakespearean-style sonnet, with 14 lines, same rhyme scheme, iambic pentameter, all that jazz :] I LOVE a good pantoum, this one is okayyyyy, but I'll probably tweak it some in the future.

Is it a poem? Is it not a poem? ...You decide? XD It feels very The Giving Tree, I think, which is technically a poem, I BELIEVE??? I like it though! Not my favorite I've done but I don't dislike it. :]

I really like this one! This is one of the ones I've had an idea for from the very beginning. I mean, technically I have a general idea of each one (mostly just a couple words of description I know I want the poem to center around) but this one was one of the first ideas I had, so it's been with me since the BEGINNING of the planning process for NaPo this year. Would love to hear people's thoughts, it's been awhile :[

i rise out of my lurking to answer your call, dear winter! =P jokes aside, this is such a cool concept, and i've loved seeing how your poems can have such a range of styles while still being connected.

some of my fav lines:

it was not so much wrongdoing he did not
notice so much as wrongbeing

what a deep twist on words :')

He was eldest when it truly mattered,

the implications??

As if blood flakes away like
rusted iron, like the strings on old guitars.

great imagery :0

the world. And all was happy. And the Dragons
were

gone.

ughhhh the contrast between "all was happy" and the Dragons being (pause) gone. T-T

i'm afraid late-night mint does not have any deeper thoughts, but know you have my faithful readership lol. all the best the rest of NaPo!!

Thank you so much, @Spearmint! I really appreciate it. I haven't been a great supporter of other people this NaPo bc it's been so busy I've barely had time to get my own writing done, so I really appreciate you leaving your thoughts <333

Don't love the title, but eh! I knew this poem needed to be at this place in the collection, so even if I don't love it, it's serving its purpose! I can always edit it later :]

it's brilliant how all of these poems are a piece to an overarching story! not only the commitment to one story feels unique, but also its way of telling a direct narrative while considering its poetic sound. the most recent poem does well in using activism to wrap up its propagandist, callous core. I found it interesting how much it wants its message to be spread to the point grouping up two drastically different age groups ("the young child, the elderly whose memory fade") together for the sake of emphasizing its attempt to draw connection between people to them, and that they want to target naivity.

I also found the word choices clever considering the context of this poster supposedly trying to advocate for the Sea. "like the tides come morning", and "rise" are specific to the sea, which radicalize you due how effective they are to get you used to the language, and the Sea by extension. on the other end of this effect, "ill-fitting" to refer to xlii does well in contrasting the Sea's identity from the king to appear more free and broad!

Your writing is splendid, and compelling!!

I wasn't able to post yesterday so today is another day of posting twice!
@lalalucky, thank you SO much for your comment. It really brightened my day and was such a pleasant surprise to see when I was hopping online to post my poems for yesterday and today :] I really appreciate it

This poem. Hurt. Almost made myself cry with this one, LOL. But that's okay, poems are for working through things.

Another sad one. Guess my energy is a little low today, but it's also reaching the sadder part of the story. We already saw the rise. We gotta see the fall now, yk? :/ Hopefully though this is a bit of therapeutic working through some things for me like some past themes have been XD

This is definitely one of those days where you just post to post, yk? Or just write a poem to write a poem. I'm not particularly proud of it, I've had a little bit of alcohol and I'm extremely tired, so I'm sure it isn't my best work. BUT I am proud of myself for committing to NaPo and continuing, even if things feel hard at certain points!

Making up for missing yesterday, even though today was arguably an even worse day, LOL. Still, this brings me joy and I want to complete thirty poems in thirty days and poem a day.

I'm officially back on track. Yay! Don't know how much I love either of them, wrote both of them within twenty minutes so they are definitely rushed but eh. That's what it's about.

heya it's me again so soon. i just really wanted to say that i'm happy that my comment gave you such joy! it is unfortunate that you had those bad days, but it's great that you've channeled your grievances to poetry, as writing can be such a powerful tool to process things. i applause you for doing so well when it comes to napo, and even pushing yourself to do so - but still, remember to treat yourself with ease.

of course i just have to mention how engaging your poetry is. not even just as a poetry art form, but also as a story. the feelings touched upon this story holds depth and your writing frames that depth well (ex: "could i skip a grade and graduate even more naive than before?" - goodness!!). to use poetry to expand on feelings & commentary makes this storytelling more unique as its own thing. the rhythm & flow of your writing is generally wonderful, captivating too (ex: poem 17 - especially the first stanza! it flows so greatly), and the great skill behind those aspects of poetry uplifts the story as well! even behind the poems you doubt (poem 19, 20 & 21), the skill behind you as a poet still remains to be seen through your writing.

i wish you many great days & better times!