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I couldn't resist. They can only appear in that order, though.
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I think Tiernan should be a skilled alchemist instead of a seer. It makes more sense that he would know how to corrupt æther that way.
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I'm hopping in a little late, but I have a character who is more of a thug-rebel type from the slums. To incorporate him into the plot, I was thinking he would, by some twist, move toward the city and settle down. Maybe he falls in love with another character?
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Does anyone wanna post something? Please?
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I can, but it would be a huge change of pace so I think it would be better to bring my character in a bit later
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Great!
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Sorry, homework and life got in the way... Hopefully I can get one together tomorrow, but one tonight won't happen. :/

On a different, I've got an idea for how to introduce Leila... She attacks Artemus's ship and gets captured, which gets two characters met up.




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Don't worry about when you post something by. I just wanted to make sure everyone hadn't suddenly lost interest.

After Leila gets captured, what would happen to her? Here's a potential plot to get Leila and Artemus involved without the two trying to kill each other (which is an option): Once Leila is captured, many pirates want her to be executed. The majority is overwhelming, and Tiernan has no choice but to sentence Leila to death. Artemus is aghast, her moral compass getting in the way of killing an unarmed, 14-year-old. She then either helps Leila escape or gets in an argument with Tiernan ("This isn't right," "I have no choice," etc.) and Leila escapes in the chaos. We assume that most of the protagonists will be on the same side, and this seems as good a way as any to introduce it. Of course, we could just end up with Leila and Artemus having a bitter rivalry for the rest of the storybook. It's up to you.
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I like the idea where Artemus helps Leila escape, because that puts them on the same side.




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Check that... the way my post is working (currently writing it), it'll make more sense for Leila to escape, rather than be aided.




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Who do you guys think Arlen would most likely interact with first?
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Posted! If Leila seems overpowered, she's not anymore powerful than other characters. She was only fighting unimportant crew members. Not to mention, she's been fighting pirates for years, and is accustomed to their tactics. Still, if you think she was too powerful, tell me and I can work on it.




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@Lael, I would guess that Arlen would end up in Needlespur, where he could run into Adelaide or even Sirjad if he's starting out undercover in the castle.

So, Needlespur is the castle, where the King and all his attendants and guards live, but it is also the largest laboratory in Kryn. It also has a spinny thing that looks like an astrolabe that harvests all æther. Fun fact.
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So I'm thinking about Sirjad's first chapter. He'll be introduced in a less action packed chapter within his house, with his daughter and he'll just have gained a job as one of the kings guard at Needlespur. We'll also find out that Sen reads Caroline's articles in the Newspaper as Belledonna Aere. I'll write all this tomorrow.

Perhaps he could also meet and get to know Arlen in Needlespur, and will have a few action packed encounters with spies from Nano who could be taking samples of Aether from the spinny thing in preparation for the big explosions later on. Later when he takes the fall from the explosions that kill the king, it could be Arlen who uses his influence to get Sirjad out of prison.

I'm probably going off on one here :D let me know what you guys think...
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