PMD: Seventeen Plates DT

Prismatic-Memories: "Heeyy this sounds pretty interesting. Though it's a little bit bland ((for me)) since there's nothing giving a visual. For the beginning paragraph, it sounded kind of desperate to sound sophisticated made the following words after dull out/rushed."
Me (As Glyphayel):
"Hi! Thanks for the feedback!
I can assure you that nothing about this Prologue is rushed nor desperate, so deeply sorry if it gives you this impression. Can't really help that.
It only introduces how the legend functions anyway, and as you'll see in the following chapters, it gets a tad more interesting. "
Prismatic-Memories:
"Err, for the future reference, it's best to take in criticism and see what you can do to help yourself improve. Rather than excuse yourself from it to not deal with it at all. Perhaps you're more suited for the art of drawing?

Hmm, just because it introduces the basics, doesn't really make it okay for it to be somewhat bland. Prologues are meant to help potential readers understand if this is worth their personal drinking time. To lay out the ingredients of what's the meal going to be, giving them a phantom taste, without serving the meal from the get-go. If you're using the prologue to lay out the laws, in order to get all that beginners stuff out of the way for the main story. I think what you're looking for is a plot-summary section."

Glyphayel: "I am taking both your feedback and every feedback that have been given to me so far without any problem.
...Oh wait, upon re-reading my previous answer, I think I got the problem. "I can assure you that nothing about this Prologue is rushed nor desperate" <--- This is what gave you the impression that I wasn't taking your feedback. Darn, sorry, that's not I meant. I think I was affected when you used the words "rushed" and "desperate". Mostly because I wasn't rushed nor desperate when I wrote this. But I'll be more careful.

That aside, you're not the first one to tell me that things are wrong with this prologue, which is why I plan to improve it in due time.
"More suited for the art of drawing?" Don't worry, I know what I want. I have a few experiences with drawing, and it's not the form of expression that pleases me. I'll follow the path I've chosen for myself and keep workin' on it.
No, it doesn't make it okay, you're right. I was just explaining what I had in mind for this first piece of writing, that's all. I didn't plan for it to be an excuse, just my view of it.
....! Oh, wow.
Ok. This is serious. Of all the critics I got so far, yours is by far the harshest, which is a good thing. I mean, that's how you drive people who read you to doubt themselves and try and get better, right? "Harsh but true" type of critics, it seems. Anyway, So... If I get what you're saying, what I should do would be make this prologue less bland? More... Vivid? One of the critics I got was that there wasn't enough details and descriptions for it, which was one of the reason why it was hard to get into it."

Prismatic-Memories: "Hm, I wasn't really saying you were rushing or desperate. Just the way the beginning seems to have been carefully detailed and used a lot of sophisticated words, doesn't mix with the latter parts that used basic repetitive wordings. So it gave off the vibe that it was rushed through in order to get to the main parts that holds more interests.

I wouldn't really say it's 'wrong' just not as great as it can be.
Aaahhh, yeaahh people's told me that I can be somewhat brutally blunt and harsh with my words even if I was giddily chatting.
Well, it's true, that's one method. But that can also depress the writer and trigger them to lose their passion.
Ah, that critic is right. At some point in the prologue, the words began to look more like a script for actors. Only we couldn't see the play off reactions of actors, or feel any emotion behind the words. The characters used in this prologue, didn't have any... characteristics. Like we were reading the text of that one NPC who everyone skips, since it's all information we could read in back of the box or something.

If you were aiming for having characters that aren't mains for the prologue, it's always best to use a memory for that type. If it's a memory, descriptions aren't really sought out.
Err, if any of this makes sense whatsoever"

G: "Well that's the problem, that's the feeling I got from your words. So yeah, my mistake. That's why I must be more careful.
...Oh. I see. I need to re-read the piece and fix that, then.

Not to be rude, but darn it, you are. You are harsh. I don't think that'll shake me enough to lose my will, though 'cause I'm kinda used to the "no mercy" kind of teaching, and I know what's good in that method. I should be fine if I just focus on that.
Right. So the main problem isn't the lack of description, but rather the lack of emotion displayed by the characters. Hmm. That one's a first. *takes notes*

A memory, huh...
...Aaaaaaaaah! I got it. And Yes, what you say does make sense to me. Now I can fix two problems. I'm going to remove that prologue (another suggestion I had), and yes, using it as a memory did cross my mind anyway, mostly because the first and second chapter have problems that I can fix if I use the prologue as a memory. It could also add more mystery to the whole thing, which is somethin' I was aiming for. Yeah, I have a plan.
There you go, thanks a ton! Sorry, for earlier, I can totally take critics, I just need to be more careful with what my words imply. Aaaaaaaand I'm also too polite."

You know that Abomasnow that will knock Aegeas out? Well, what if he had a Mega stone with him? Then it would be similar to fighting not one, not two, but three boss fights consecutively!

You have no idea how the little gears in my evil head are working right now. XD. That is a brilliant idea! I like the suggestion, and it would do wonders advancing the plot of the story and making events all the more complicated. Three consecutive boss fights, eh? Wow, now that sounds like an endurance contest. O_O. Thanks for the suggestion!