zankoku_na_tenshi

Hey there! This was definitely an interesting start, I'm curious to hear more about your world and characters. I did think that maybe the story of how Kamir became blind ...

Sorry for my lateness once again, I've been really busy for a few weeks now. Once again, nice chapter! I, like Demeter, though the armpit hair thing was a little ...

Sorry for being so late... I think this was a pretty well-done chapter as well, and I like how you're showing us a bit more vulnerability and struggle on the ...

Yay, day five! I like this chapter much more then the previous one, your character got a lot more fleshed out and you were back t showing rather than telling. ...

Okay, day four! :) The guest speaker said that if teens didn’t create a healthy lifestyle now, they could become obese when they grow older, if they aren’t already. She ...

Sorry for the lateness, I'm having real trouble editing this chapter. it's hard to find things that are wrong with it, frankly. XD You're doing a great job with this ...

Hello! This second chapter is quite well done as well. Once again, your narrative voice is brilliant, and your main character is likable and easy to relate to. ^_^ Gah, ...

Hi there! This was a pretty good start, and your narration is very inviting and easy to read. I really like, as others have said, how sincere and genuine it ...

The story's only been up a couple days, be patient. ^_^ Anyway, this was a really great opening, and I like the way you set the scene in the grocery ...

Sorry for being late. XD Well, I'll critique since you asked, but keep this in mind: I know nothing, and I mean nothing , about poetry. I know less about ...

Gah! I know I'm late, sorry. Now that my last-minute-pre-AP-test panic is over, I can give you a proper review. ^_^ Overall, this was an intriguing chapter-- I must admit ...

Hey there! Haven't seen you around before, so welcome to YWS! This is a really good start, I very much enjoyed it. The bit at the beginning really pulled me ...

Hey there! That was a pretty good start, and I too, really liked the letters to home. They helped establish a good flow in the piece. I also found myself ...

Late to critique as ever, I don't think there's really anything I can say about this that hasn't been said before. So, to repeat the rest: I thought this was ...

Haha, that was pretty good. It made me laugh in any case. Perhaps not rolling-on-the-floor, my-sides hurt-because-I-can't-stop-laughing funny, but it made me giggle and cheered me up. I'll read just ...