zalarus

i appreciate the effort you put into this work, but i find it kind of trite and cliched. there really isn't much here other than what is seen at face ...

ehh, i'm not a fan. as usual, i agree with galerius' opinion of this piece. it was grammatically flawed, cliched and predictable. but i also concur that it could actually ...

not entirely bad. it wasn't great, certainly, but it was okay. it flowed particularly well, except for in the fourth stanza, on the last line. it wasn't very artistic, or ...

you probably shouldn't dislike it as much as you do. it's better than most poetry on here. you express being trapped within a metaphorical box quite well. i haven't read ...

this is truly bitter and meaningless. i agree with your point, which is that people should be free-thinking individuals. but by attacking them like this, you're just playing their game. ...

very nice. artful and purposeful, it basically has most of the things i look for in a poem. there were times when your vocabulary could have used some tweaking, but ...

i enjoyed reading this. it reminded me of the short fiction of charles bukowski. it was bleak, dreary, and the narrator sounds like a wretch. you did a good job ...

heh, i feel the same way about school. i am a completely out of the box person, while doing well in school requires that i be within said box. but ...

i hate to say it, but i agree with galerius, especially in that this just seems like a speech about your worries in verse. there is no artistry here. i've ...

well, this poem accomplishes what it sets out to do, i'll give you that. it rhymed well, it seemed to flow, and it was well-written, especially at the end. however, ...

this is good. optimistic-hopeful. i can appreciate courage in the face of adversity. on the poem itself: it's great. very few mistakes, other than some capitalization errors. but those are ...

well it certainly got its message across, i'll give you that. i'm sure the person this is directed to would be quite taken aback by the unrestrained rage here. but ...

hmmm... the anger and sadness really stand out in in this one. i've felt the same at times. feeling you're not good enough for your loved one... knowing that you've ...

although this poem relates to me in several ways, and although i do appreciate the effort, i think that you're a bit off. you could use some better wording, and ...

this is a very solid piece of work. normally i'm not a huge fan of rhyming poetry, but this overcame that ridiculous obstacle easily enough. i'd change a few phrases, ...