zaid

Very nicely done. The start was superb ! but the second stanza missed out a bit , though the rest made up for it. There's also a small grammatical mistake. ...

Awesomely written I must say, very concise and very vivid, full of colors. :D Keep it up Sincerely, Zaid.

I really liked the story, the plot is vividly explained and you kept the reader reading till the end. :D Zaid.

Very awesome work done here. Keep it up. :) Zaid.

Very nice, You trapped the reader with the incompleteness in the start and the abrupt begging. Sincerely, Zaid.

You've done a great job here. It's really inspiring as well as flawless. I look forward to seeing more of you. Thumbs up. Zaid.

I wish you'd use better language and more appropriate words. Express yourself in a good way with good words. The idea was great but you didn't do it justice. Sincerely, ...

I like the idea but you haven't portrayed it in a right way. Firstly your stanzas are in some places too short and in some places too long, Same is ...