zackattack

Thanks for the advice! It's very helpful, i wrote this in a matter of a couple of minutes, I like to call it raw, simply because of that. When i ...

Don't listen to the replies that are downing you poem I found it wonderful, you don't get to see much of that these days, keep up the good work, your ...

This was inteeresting, although you shouldn't use random capitalization, the noodles part made me laugh, it seemed like it just doesn't belong, this was nice and sweet, I'm looking forward ...

It flowed pretty well, if you didn't mean for it to then ignore the last comment, simple, sweet, and most of powerful, when it's read the right way it can ...

Beautiful, you created a world that seems interesting, it's one I want to get lost in, which i rare for me, it could use maybe a little more of a ...

Beautiful, it's a story you can visualize in your head. Wonderful!

This is very interesting, it makes inspired, you are very good, try to use more description to show more of an epic/dramatic effect.