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  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: They all fall in the end

    First off, I love the analogy. You paralleled the two things perfectly, and you explained it really well. The only thing I would change is beef up the second half ...

    May 22, 2011

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Sparkling Embers.

    Hey there! I must say, WOW! That was great. I loved the sentence when you said, "It had been seventy-two hours of emptiness... ironic, really, considering how full to the ...

    May 28, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Goodbye

    Hey there! I must disagree with Stella. I thought that it was realistic. I could relate. Just because it is the 21st century doesn't mean that it doesn't feel like ...

    Apr 11, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: The Only One I'm Dreaming of.

    This feels like you weren't fully into it. Like Elinor and emmylou1995 said, it fell a little flat. You were trying to make us want more, but all that I ...

    Apr 11, 2010

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: A Love Letter.

    Hello there. First off, let me introduce you to YWS! It's quite a feat to have your first work become featured. I've been on for almost a year now and ...

    Apr 11, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: Sun Kissed

    I read your first post of this story, and I have to say, I liked it more. This one lacks emotion, whereas the other had some, if not enough. For ...

    Apr 9, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: I'm so ashamed of you, comrie.

    Hey comrie, I liked this. It was new, and it didn't make me want to hit the back button and pick another story. Your first line wasn't as good as ...

    Apr 9, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Sun Kissed. An old fashioned teen pregnacy

    Hey there! I liked this. I've always enjoyed old fashioned stories, and this one made me feel like I was being transported to another time. I was a little confused ...

    Apr 7, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Ment For More

    Youreit here, ready to review! First of all, this is full of cliches, which is all fine and dandy, but only if you can make it work. I'm sorry to ...

    Apr 5, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Whispers From The Grave

    I loved it! A simple word of advice: Don't turn it into a chapter and write more. It's so good as a stand alone that writing more might kill it. ...

    Apr 4, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Why do we love?

    Alrighty, I'm back! First of all, this is a great topic, and I think you can get a lot out of it. You have a good story, but you need ...

    Feb 22, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: He Didn't Like Me

    Hey there! I just popped on YWS for a few minutes, telling myself that all I could do right now was get a few reviews done. Then I found some ...

    Feb 21, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: For a Reason

    Hey there! I disagree with the two above me. I don't think it was too fast. However, like Loveless, I think you have a minor grammar problem. These things can ...

    Feb 21, 2010

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Temporary Love

    youreit here! First off, I'd suggest rating this at least 16+, because of violence and prostitution. Now, on to the review! I didn't catch any grammatical errors, which is great, ...

    Feb 21, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: Give Me Your Hands Part 3

    I loved the ending! You were still moving a little fast, but I absolutely loved the ending. Did I mention that I loved the ending? I was sort of confused ...

    Feb 20, 2010


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