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Typo fixed. Thank you Myth and Krystal! :)

Thank you! ^_^

Much better than the first poem I ever wrote. Seventh line though, "mesmorising" is spelled mesmerising. Otherwise, I thought this was exteremly well done for a first attempt. ^_^ Keep ...

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Yes, keep writing!!! My first attempts were horrid. (Most still are...) But you do definitely get better! Just listen to the advice everyone gives you. It does help. ^_^ Good ...

Very nice poem. I love the ending. I love the simplistic style and how short it is. I love short reads. :D Good work. ~Yoha

Touching and sweet but not of the highest quality. If it serves your purposes though, run with it. :) Keep on writing! ~Yoha

Thanks guys! It's been a while since I've written anything really. I'm glad this one turned out so well and that you like it. :)

Great poem. I love it. But "dieing" is spelled 'dying'.

Cool poem. I love the title. :)

Gorgeous. Is it about a girl who died? Because it reminded me of a girl from my school who died two years ago at 16. Very touching though. Great piece.

Nice and depressing. ^_^ I love Fruits Basket. Haven't watched it in a long time but it's really good. :) Nice job.

Yes! Cute poem. Adorable. I love the rhyming. :D Great job.

I thought this was a great poem. No complaints really. You have some great lines in here, I agree. Nice work. ~Yoha

I didn't find anything wrong with this except maybe do some capitalization. I love the idea expressed in this poem. Beautiful. :) Great work.