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nice chapter i was wondering if ur mc never saw humans before the trader how does she no wat a sock was or how mark got his jeans? like would ...

hey love the tension here and curious how she went from denial to the present situation with mark.

yea i agree with other ppl, its raw and truthful, i prefer the raps tat r out there tat are more meaningful like this one, and like common's girl with ...

ops, i read half then saw this, The storys' great, and intersting to read, so keep writing, I'm looking forward to the next chapters xFlora ^^

ops, i read half then saw this, The storys' great, and intersting to read, so keep writing, I'm looking forward to the next chapters xFlora ^^

Wow thank you, I really appreciated your review. I cant belive you read it out to your whole IT class! I was so suprised. If I was anywhere near there, ...

O ops i read the 1st draft of chapter One. I like how you developed it more, intersting way how to introduce so many characters within one chapter. Why is ...

yeah thanks , I think I might delete some, when i posted it I was pretty unsure whether or not to do so, because it was such a rush written ...

Its really good and I love the descriptions. The guy does seem mysterious and even to the end you dont no what he's thinking, or how it should be interupted.

thanks for critquing my work. Actually whats a period as in like a paragraph?

I found it really intersting and mysterious poem, your imagery was well written as well

ok done re-editing it, thanks for the critique buddy ^^

o btw this is for an assesment, that i hav to take 2 characters from texts we studied and thats y it might not make much sense

wow really good, i love the way u combined the piano with love, because thats the feeling tat i get when i hear a passionate pianest play, also the way ...

wow really good, i love the way u combined the piano with love, because thats the feeling tat i get when i hear a passionate pianest play, also the way ...