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...Louis stared quietly into the fire on the hearth through intense grey eyes, aching all over still from the fight. Ira sat next to him, bleeding from his nose and ...

Ira walked ahead of the company, his eyes analyzing the bleak land. From what he could see, there was nothing out there, at least, no Underworlders. Ahead of them was ...

Heya Mango :) Wow, this is very good. You have a very mature, no-nonsense way of writing that I really like. The five reasons for dying thing in the beginning ...

Hey Emiloo :) It was a beautiful house, old and wooden. I remember moving in. I was only six but as it was the first day I set eyes on ...

Hey :) I thought it might take me a while to get to your novel, but by the looks of it I think I'll have time to review it right ...

Hiya! :) As she breathed she thought of the salt filled air filling her lungs, she could almost taste it as she breathed it in This sentence seems to echo. ...

Hey :) Finially the review is up! ... Siobhan watched Zayn pull on a pair of black leather gauntlets from where she stood in the center of their chambers. Tears ...

Hey Jenn! The only thing I could think of would be to add another couple of stanzas, because it feels like you start off great, and then ditch us at ...

Hi again, telle! Alright, so for me, the chorus and the very first stanza were amazing. I read it slowly and it really made sense. However, the second stanza felt ...

Back again :) I. You hummed out a sweet, sad note Then took out a pen and wrote and old familiar quote There was no sound, you looked around and ...

Hi! I'll do my best with this review :) Honestly, I thought it was cute, but not much above that. To me, the concept is too cliche- boy meeting girl ...

Hi! Thanks for letting me know this next part was up :) Alright,I wasn’t really a fan of this chapter. I can tell that you rushed it. The main issue ...

This is a very very short chapter, and if I were you, I wouldn’t end it where you did, but continue on for another couple of pages with this great ...

Hi there :) "what are 16 year old girls supposed to do outside on a Saturday morning?" Danny asked shaking her head. spell out sixteen Andy was average in length ...

Musk infiltrated the air upon entering; a thick layer of intoxicating vile stung my nostrils, tightened the looseness of my throat as I peered waywardly about the room. this first ...