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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Hanging

    Hey :D His fingers fiddled with his zipper and fear continued to grip him, Zipper on his jacket, I'm assuming? Under the sleeves of his hoodie, his hair stood on ...

    May 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Stupid feelings

    Stupid feelings I have stupid feelings That comes should be 'come'. Stupid feelings come. from all sorts of places, From my head, from my heart Stupid, stupid messed up feelings ...

    Apr 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: My Hiro ~ Prologue and chapter 1; part 1

    Prologue: He was running out of time. I was uncontrollable, inconsolable. I was the mess I feared becoming again and yet thats exactly what became of me I don’t understand ...

    Apr 30, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Puppet Master (New Version)

    He was waiting for her in the study, the place of his birth. He stood in front of her desk with his back to the doorway, running a gnarled finger ...

    Apr 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Jonah In the Night- Chapter One

    Hey again! Sorry if my reviews are a little behind x) Chapter One I awoke to the same sounds as before, laughing and speaking. All was enveloped in darkness now ...

    Apr 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Jonah In the Night- Prologue

    Prologue. Night I am Jonah. I guess a lot of what we do is in our names. My own name reminds me of a Biblical tale in which a prophet ...

    Apr 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Chapter 25: Unwanted Contact

    Marcus cut the engine. The boat slowed in the open ocean. David was sitting on the bench, loading his rifle. Scott sat inside with Marcus. To me, the choppy sentence ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: The Story of William Krenith(Part 1/4)

    I apologize in advance for any errors, it's almost 3 am x) PART ONE: Breaking the Fringe of Corruption Akron, Ohio-Late Summer, 2076 I think there should be spacing between ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Violet Saga: Year One Chapter 3: edited

    Alexis stirred in her sleep, the package from the night before had slipped out of her grasp during the night and lied on the floor. Rosa was coming inside, returning ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Violet Saga: Year One Chapter 2: EDITED

    Alexis slept deeply, her breath short, her chest rising and falling slowly. Her fingers wrapped around the blanket, clutching it tightly as she dreamt. Her eyelids fluttered quietly as she ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Deleted

    There was a strong scent on the air, a sickening mixture of flesh and blood and smoke. It was becoming more potent as Zayn approached the Little Rock Settlement. This ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    Hey Lele, I love this. I really do :) This is your best poem so far and you should feel very proud of it! I could never write poetry, and ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: An Abstract Life: Binding

    Hey! Finally I have my review. I did it a little different than I normally do. Usually, I go through the nitpicks and then have the overall comments at the ...

    Apr 19, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Family Feud: Chapter 3

    As we are riding towards the entrance, my stomach starts growling. “Dad, can we stop to eat somewhere? I’m like so hungry.” I whine. “No. We can not we are ...

    Apr 18, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Family Feud: Chapter 2

    The next few minutes were silent, no one talked and just watched where dad had stood. Then I turned to my mother in hopes of salvaging my attempt. “Mom, can ...

    Apr 18, 2011


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