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Hello, This was a very suspenseful introduction to what I think will turn out to be a great story. I have yet to read the next few chapters due to ...

(I knew it!! ;D) Just read the two chapters, and I'll say that they were just as good, if not better than the first. The pacing is really good, and ...

I think this would be very interesting if you expanded a bit on the culture a little more. Since the narrator is in a museum, the reader should be getting ...

This chapter was very nice. The character development was strong, and the pace was even throughout most of the chapter. I can definitely see improvement from just the first chapter, ...

This was very interesting. I liked the way the two characters connected with more personal matters up front, and rather saving the less important, everyday identities to be discovered later. ...

Wow, this was so captivatingly beautiful. The space/sky reference kept this whimsical feel to the descriptions, as though going back in time, or centered around thoughts of past events in ...

First, I'm going to say that this was fairly interesting from the beginning. There was a nice flow in your words and the character's thought process and the plot seems ...

The storyline is interesting, as it could be made into a good plot with a bit of adjustments. From the beginning, I noticed a decent amount of spelling errors and/or ...

Hello, First off, I really enjoyed this story. Right from the beginning, I caught on to Elly's wonder with the night sky and the vivid description was great; elaborate, but ...