wonderland

Alright, so, my confusion hasn't been eased from the last chapter, and I'm getting more Harry Potter vibes as I read on. You-both of you- need to slow down a ...

Alright, so, I am sorely confused. You need to explain a lot more, and give the reader something to go on. As RangerHawk said above me, that both the prologues ...

Alright, so, I have a few general comments with this piece 1) Your font was too small, and I had to zoom in a lot to read it. I actually ...

Alright, so, this was long. Very long. I'd suggest breaking it into parts, so it's easier for your readers to read it. It was long, and I'm heavily ADHD. It ...

Alright, so, I was confused, all about why this was happening. You gave good details and imagery within your writing, but that didn't clear up my question-Why is this all ...

Alright, so, I only read about a quarter of this to learn it was the exact same as the first chapter. There was minimal details, no emotion, and way too ...

Alright, so, This was actually well written. I enjoyed it. It made me smile, then ending, becuase it was optimistic, but not in a totally happy/fake optimistic way. It seems ...

Alright, so, I'm a little torn as to wether to like this poem or not. One one hand, it's simple, and I'm not much for simple poetry. I always want ...

Alright, so, this was all just telling the reader. You gave the reader mass amounts of details, without really backing them up, or giving emotion. Pieces like that can get ...

Alright, so, to me, this was just monotonous. I couldn't feel the emotion, and the ending left me no will to go on. I do realize that this supposed to ...

Alright, so, Vasticity brings up a good point, and I fully agree with him. However, I'm going to touch up on something else-your imagery and emotions need work. Imagery is ...

Alright so, I only read half of this. It didn't grab my attention in a special way, and it was just a rant towards depression in a constant flow, I ...

Alright, so, I'll say this-that was very well written-a piece that played with the imagination and the readers emotions. Although I have to admit that I don't like prologues, this ...

Alright, so, I didn't get much of an impression from this chapter. All her movements seemed posed, like you planned way too much for the chapter. Loosen up a bit, ...

Alright, so, first off, I honestly couldn't stand your first sentence. It was horridly cliche, and really, not grabbing It was a dark and stormy night, the wind blowing hard ...