wizkid515

Hey This is a great prologue. You caught my attention as soon as the story started. I felt like I was right there watching the story unfold. I liked how ...

*tears rain down* OMG this is.. the most beautiful thing i've ever read. well done. *Bows Respectfully* you should continue. i hope you make it in to something wonderful. your ...

hey wiz here i suck at writing crits so, here we go down the track of horror. This poem screams at me. somthing similar happened to me so :smt010 :smt013 ...

cool. i wished i thought of something like this. promise i won't steal *crosses heart with finger*. :arrow: you had nice character descriptions but i felt like i didn't know ...

nice. this has a great use of descriptions. i quite liked it and i cant wait to read more A couple of questions though... 1. This is at the end ...

OK first things first silversun! LOVED IT!!!! :D :D :D your descriptions and emotions run deep. moved me, really! your characters were well described and you show great potential as ...

this is a great base for a story and with the tiniest bit of nitpicking and tweaking you would probably won that vampire competition. Your characters held a great amount ...

hi. i don't know much about poetry but i thought this was wonderful. i always thought that every line has to rhyme. i have no idea what a stanza or ...

LOOOOOOVED IT!!! :thud: absolutely stunning piece. best i have seen on YWS! no jokes. near flawless. everyone got the mistakes so i will leave them but still... loved it! awesome ...

WOW! LOVED IT! :thud: *does happy/ likes the story dance* You are a great writer. unlike me. I'm rubbish at writing. I need more of this. you must continue! If ...

Great story. I am rubbish with the whole spelling/grammar ranting thing. So i will just talk about your plot. At first i found that you had a great story with ...

wonderful piece! i absolutly loved it. my very bad reviewing skills would do you no help at all so, keep up the good work. i can't wait to see your ...

my gosh!!! you are great!!! :thud: this plot has the perfect amount of everything i love about books I'm horrible at spelling and grammar mistakes so i will just talk ...

Great work!!! :lol: This is a great story with an interesting plot. I think it would be a great story if you continue with it. i am only a new ...

love love love it! the guy before was so thorough it i couldn't find anything else. though i thought the story was a little twilight i still loved it. Have ...