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The rhyme is forced because it had to rhyme for class. I wrote it a long time ago before I really had any understanding of poem mechanics. I haven't edited ...

Very nice! Especially since it was spur of the moment. Besides a few grammar things, it is a great poem!

Great poem, and great style. I love the way you never really say what you are talking about, but you still make things clear. However, you do tend to jump ...

Sometimes the thought of the moment is the truth at its basic. And this would be such a thought! :D

Absolutely amazing! The imagery was superb! Every line dripped with emotion!

Utterly breath-taking and imaginative! It is filled with wonder and possibilities!

Really beautiful! Some parts are just a bit confusing the first time you read them, but overall a wonderful prayer!

Thanks everyone for the comments, but i didn't add punctuation on purpose. And you don't have to capitalize every line. It is suposed to sound stressed and run together.