ultraviolet

Hey, thanks for the reviews, guys! They helped clear a lot of things up for me, as for what came across the way I intended and what didn't. The story ...

Hello there! First of all, I love the descriptions you have in here. They gave a sense that you clearly understand what you're talking about. "Shake, and the petals of ...

Hey there, silent! Back as requested. First of all, I want to say that the pace at the ending was a bit better - less abrupt. But I think maybe's ...

I edited this, if anyone wants to take a look:

I've edited this. I'm not sure if I'm actually portraying her emotions all the well, or enough, or whatever, but I suppose it's up to you to decide that. Would ...

Crap, I always forget to *like* things after I review them... ... *likes*

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Thanks for the reviews. I'm not a very good poet, so I really appreciate them. =) lily>> I want to say you have... but I'm honestly not sure. xD And ...

Hey there! I'm back. 8) First off, is there a reason this is a prologue? Because it seems like the story itself. So unless this is a flashback or peak ...

Thanks for the reviews, guys! They're actually very helpful. So you know (and I'm not sure if this changes anything) the way I wrote this chapter, it was never meant ...

I switched the chapter order, so this is no longer the flashback. Canis, if you have time would you maybe review this part? If not, that's totally fine. Thanks for ...

Chapter 2 is up, if any of you would (please :3 ) like to look at it.

Thanks for all the reviews. You pinpointed all the things I didn't like about this, and now I know how to fix them! *beams* And actually, bouncing off each other ...

Thanks for the reviews! @Written - for the first line, do you think taking out the "And" at the beginning would help? (That's what I'm going to do.) And for ...

Hey! So, this is a little better. There's still quite a bit of talking, which is fine. I'd just suggest making Jackie a little more emotional about it, whether angry ...