ultraviolet

Hey there, TheSybarite! First of all, I want to say that this is a really cute little piece! I really liked some of your descriptions and some of the ways ...

Hey there, silent! Back as requested. First of all, I want to say that the pace at the ending was a bit better - less abrupt. But I think maybe's ...

I'm here! I'm here! Hold the presses! Okay, so first, sorry for taking so long. I'm sure by now you've realized that I'm an amazing procrastinator, and really, you should ...

Hey there! Okay, so at the beginning of this, everything feels very... misty. Transparent, almost, like a ghost; intangible; indirect. We get descriptions of the place, but it's still hard ...

Rachey! Here I am, hopefully your first reviewer of the evening (though, by the time I finish this, I'm not sure I will be). First of all, I was a ...

Hey there, dasiamarie! Or maybe they did. I'm not sure exactly what you mean by this. I'd add onto the sentence, make your meaning clear; just a few more words ...

Hey there! Okay, so obviously you have more words that you can use - I'd like to see you dig deeper into this. When I first read of the wedding, ...

Hey there! I don't normally quote the whole work to make comments, but seeing as this is fairly short and there are some grammar issues I want to take care ...

Hey there! I haven't read the previous chapters, so this is going to be mostly execution reviewing. Something I noticed is that you're very good at pacing. Even at the ...

Hey there, Kaitlin! Since it appears you've gotten no reviews, here I am. When she was younger, she opened new books to break their backs, letting the spines crack beneath ...

Hey there! I noticed that occasionally you have sentences that are messed up in some way - mostly run-ons - but nothing major, nothing really repeating, so I'm not going ...

Hey there, High! Fellow redman here to review. 8) First of all, can I just say that I love how Kate's real name is Kathryn? 'Cause that's my name! Even ...

Why, hello there! So, overall, lovely story, lovely writing. However, there are a few things I have questions about (though they may be sorted out in the next part; I'll ...

Hey there! Seeing as this has no feedback, here I am, inadequately helpful as ever. First of all, let me just say that the writing here is beautiful. Eloquent, intoxicating, ...

Hey there, Ranger! Looks like you've got no reviews, so here I am. For the most of it, this is done well; nice voice, descriptions, lovely pacing. But there were ...