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Re: Mirror
I really like this poem, girl. However, I have to say that it's not one of your bests. While I very much like the idea that you have behind it, ...
Feb 11, 2014 -
Re: Caged
Before even beginning to read this, I can already tell that you're going to need to separate this into paragraphs. The paragraph that you have now is too long and ...
Jan 31, 2014 -
Re: Out of Water Experience
I came in to read this poem -read the title, pondered whether or not it would be worth it, and decided that I might as well- and I was totally ...
Jan 31, 2014 -
Re: Strawberry-Banana Girl
I don't have any nitpicks for you, girl!! That's a lot from me since I can usually find errors in anything (other than my own works). This is really a ...
Jan 27, 2014 -
Re: Pokemon Egx(Chapter 1)
I liked this piece, but it simply wasn't my cup of tea. The way that you made it into a more adult piece just felt wrong to me. I seriously ...
Jan 20, 2014 -
Re: Redo
I was simply enchanted by this poem! I find it pretty difficult to use rhyme, so I applaud you for that! Even though this poem is, in the end, just ...
Jan 20, 2014 -
Re: The Elemental's
I really enjoyed this piece, but I couldn't help but to be distracted by all of the errors. I also never felt for the characters. There was simply a lack ...
Jan 20, 2014 -
Re: Tumult
I really enjoyed this~ It's vague, yet it somehow captures the jittery, shaken, all-over-the-place feelings of nervousness. I also can't help but to feel that the third stanza (or third ...
Jan 20, 2014 -
Re: Perfect Girl
Hello Kekai~ I wanted to let you know that this is an amazing poem and it captured me from the very first stanza. I absolutely loved reading it, and that's ...
Jan 13, 2014 -
Re: Scribbling Galaxies
I am in LOVE with this, girl~ It's not every day that you find a conceptually well off Doctor Who fanfiction. I look forward to reading more! I enjoyed the ...
Jan 5, 2014 -
Re: Betrayal
Hello! I'm pleased to inform you that I will be reviewing this piece for you! Hopefully, you take my advice into account and make improvements upon your writing. Onto the ...
Dec 30, 2013 -
Re: Here Be Dragon
This was a very enchanting story and I loved every moment of it! I love the idea of the protagonist accidentally stumbling into the dragon's lair and striking a deal ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Because I Am Afraid
I'm skipping the niceties and getting to the nitty-gritty. This piece is wonderfully written, but there are sections where you disrupt the flow. I've chosen a few sentences to even ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: Flash Fiction- Under the Gaze of God
This is a very elegant, descriptive piece. I loved it! However, you need to decrease the sizes of your paragraphs. They're giant and intimidating. I'll take care of your largest ...
Dec 29, 2013 -
Re: My Friend in the Mirror
This was a very interesting story and I'm quite pleased with it. However, there are a few corrections that need to be made. In the note, the period after Aiman ...
Dec 29, 2013
