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  • Poetry » Lyrical, Dramatic Re: Mirror

    I really like this poem, girl. However, I have to say that it's not one of your bests. While I very much like the idea that you have behind it, ...

    Feb 11, 2014
  • Short Story » Other, General Re: Caged

    Before even beginning to read this, I can already tell that you're going to need to separate this into paragraphs. The paragraph that you have now is too long and ...

    Jan 31, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Out of Water Experience

    I came in to read this poem -read the title, pondered whether or not it would be worth it, and decided that I might as well- and I was totally ...

    Jan 31, 2014
  • Poetry » Humor, Romantic Re: Strawberry-Banana Girl

    I don't have any nitpicks for you, girl!! That's a lot from me since I can usually find errors in anything (other than my own works). This is really a ...

    Jan 27, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Action / Adventure Re: Pokemon Egx(Chapter 1)

    I liked this piece, but it simply wasn't my cup of tea. The way that you made it into a more adult piece just felt wrong to me. I seriously ...

    Jan 20, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Redo

    I was simply enchanted by this poem! I find it pretty difficult to use rhyme, so I applaud you for that! Even though this poem is, in the end, just ...

    Jan 20, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Teen Fiction Re: The Elemental's

    I really enjoyed this piece, but I couldn't help but to be distracted by all of the errors. I also never felt for the characters. There was simply a lack ...

    Jan 20, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative Re: Tumult

    I really enjoyed this~ It's vague, yet it somehow captures the jittery, shaken, all-over-the-place feelings of nervousness. I also can't help but to feel that the third stanza (or third ...

    Jan 20, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: Perfect Girl

    Hello Kekai~ I wanted to let you know that this is an amazing poem and it captured me from the very first stanza. I absolutely loved reading it, and that's ...

    Jan 13, 2014
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Fanfiction Re: Scribbling Galaxies

    I am in LOVE with this, girl~ It's not every day that you find a conceptually well off Doctor Who fanfiction. I look forward to reading more! I enjoyed the ...

    Jan 5, 2014
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Betrayal

    Hello! I'm pleased to inform you that I will be reviewing this piece for you! Hopefully, you take my advice into account and make improvements upon your writing. Onto the ...

    Dec 30, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Here Be Dragon

    This was a very enchanting story and I loved every moment of it! I love the idea of the protagonist accidentally stumbling into the dragon's lair and striking a deal ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Dramatic Re: Because I Am Afraid

    I'm skipping the niceties and getting to the nitty-gritty. This piece is wonderfully written, but there are sections where you disrupt the flow. I've chosen a few sentences to even ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Historical Fiction Re: Flash Fiction- Under the Gaze of God

    This is a very elegant, descriptive piece. I loved it! However, you need to decrease the sizes of your paragraphs. They're giant and intimidating. I'll take care of your largest ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Short Story » Narrative, Dramatic Re: My Friend in the Mirror

    This was a very interesting story and I'm quite pleased with it. However, there are a few corrections that need to be made. In the note, the period after Aiman ...

    Dec 29, 2013


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