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As a member of the GAAF, I'm going to review your piece primarily for grammar. "On the edge of sleep, just after I dream about Mother, I dream about Father ...

SPC Ulala reporting to make edits to your piece! "But Dianne was not feeling..." Please don't ever start a sentence with "but". "Because" is only sometimes acceptable. "Amazing that she ...

PFC Ulala reporting to review your piece! "India, a land of ancient tales and fables." The comma should be changed to a colon. "India, a land of ancient tales and ...

PFC Ulala reporting to review your piece! I agree with magpie94 completely. However, I've caught quite a few more errors than they did. "I walked out of the cafe garden ...

I agree wholeheartedly with what Caiti97 said. I very much enjoy the premise of this story, but it definitely still has a LOT of work to be done. To start, ...

I really enjoyed your piece, but my main goal here is to remedy your grammar. That's my new mission here on YWS: to improve the grammar of all of the ...

I very much enjoyed this poem, though it was quite confusing for me. I understand that it's meant to be confusing as you're trying to capture the dysfunctional feeling of ...

I really enjoyed to learn about the origins of Valentines day. Having not ever felt the need to research it, I learned quite a lot from this piece. However, this ...

I really like this piece and it really helps to motivate me! I've read it over twice now and I have a few things to offer to you. First, I ...

I'm going to apologize in advance. This review isn't going to be so much about your writing as it is about your presentation. Unfortunately, people on YWS aren't very keen ...

Wow. That's that I really have to say. Just. Wow. When I started reading this, it was a little hard to digest, but once I made it through and the ...

This is certainly not going to be the best review because I honestly didn't read it. I know that you don't have it under short story, but people here on ...

This was a really really fun poem!! I relate to this a lot and I enjoyed every second of it. It's not every day that something on YWS captures my ...

I really like this poem, no joke. I can really relate to this poem and the message that it sends out about a teen's inner struggle. The only sort of ...

When I was reading through this, I was flat out confused. Finally, when I reached the last stanza, it suddenly hit me and all of the poem made sense. I ...