turtlethatroars

Hey there! Welcome to this site as well! If you need help, feel free to ask! :) Suggestions But most importantly, we believe the lies because we want to. I ...

Hey! So with the way YWS formatted this I will do my best to review it and assume where the breaks would be. Suggestions Don’t shoot us! Why do you ...

Hello! Suggestions Lilly was already half way through pulling her gun out when a door appeared in the wall and opened. Half way through what? If you mean she was ...

Hi! Suggestions I actually don't really have any suggestions for this chapter... O.O Cool. Lovely Things I glared at it. “Jerk.” Only he would call an "innocent box" a jerk. ...

Hey there! Suggestions She has already lost her soul, and has no love but war itself. I feel like you should say: "and has no love but for war itself." ...

Hello again! Suggestions yet the managed to smash Iropolice completely. The "the" should be a "they". Lovely Things Six hours, seven minutes and twenty three seconds. I like how you ...

Hey! So, I'm finally here to review this! Sorry it too me so long to get to it! Suggestion I realized it was a grenade to late I believe this ...

Hey! I saw you put this chapter out! :) Suggestions What kind of sicko paints with blood? I would change "sicko" into psycho. It just drives the point that the ...

Hey there! :D Suggestions I screamed, and wiggled I don't think you really need the comma here. Not sure why, It should work. The "I" should be lowercase or you ...

Hello there! :) Suggestions Something that has been recognized since the beginning You should add punctuation at the end of this. I would use a period. But one day only ...

Hello there! :) Suggestions What was warm was you, Blinding spectrum of red and true blue; I would get rid of the comma after you and just make it a ...

Hey you! :D Suggestions One could almost say it was I was best friends with the dreaded thing, since it keeps coming around and I never seem to be able ...

Hello, hello, hello!! This piece was really great. I liked the meaning behind it. You are a fantastic writer! I don't really have any advise on how to improve it ...

Hello, hello, hello! Tkpejb here for a quick review. (I can never write quick reviews! Haha.) The concept behind this and the words are fantastic! There are certain things about ...

Hello, hello, hello! This piece is wonderful and beautiful! I love it a lot. ^_^ There isn't much I would change about this piece I just have a few suggestions. ...