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Hello! Welcome to YWS! I have decided to review your poem today. :D Remember that the beginning of every line should be a capital letter. Lost in a world all ...

I agree with Rosey. (She's always right!!!) The shorter lines make it way too difficult to read. Otherwise, I really like it. :) It turns out you chose one of ...

I didn't really understand it at first, but after I thought about it I was moved to tears. If I'm correct, it's about a mother who's in an abusive relationship ...

BUT.... I feel like I am reading a story sometimes, your lines are just too long. I agree with May on that. I actually like the long lines, the story ...

I love it. :) There are only two nit picks I have. 1. Each new line needs to be capitalized. That's just a basic poem-grammar thing. 2. Try to be ...

Crit welcomed :) No criticism needed at all! That was beautiful! I love how you make it rhyme and flow very nicely with out it sounding forced. I can just ...

Very well done. :) All of the verses matched perfectly with the original song, though I couldn't really picture the chorus. And as for the "do the Dumbledore and dance ...

I really like it. :) It has a very sweet feeling to it. As I was reading, I was picturing myself listening to this song on my ipod, swaying along. ...

I have never read nor heard of the book that you're writing the essay on, but I'll try to help you with it as much as I can. I read ...

I really like it. :) Two small issues with it, though. Where you say, "So damn inadequate." Your poem gave me the first impression of being nice and slow, something ...

It was very nice, feels slightly immature, but this is a young writers site! :) I can tell that this poem has a lot of promise to it, but the ...

Hmm...I wasn't expecting to like it! lol, that was a compliment. haha. Callesed, strong hands snatch me from my fall, I look into my fathers eyes and I know I'll ...

Very amazing! I LOVE how it actually does look like a staircase. March I'm guessing you meant that to be lower case. Unless you meant it to be that way ...

My favorite character is hands down Will! He is so down to earth and a hard working man (my type of guy!) Don't read the following spoiler unless you have ...

Bravo to you, Black Rabbit! I'm going against everyone else above, because I actually like how you put "gents and ladies". Since this is a conceited person, he thinks higher ...