timjim77

No, though I've heard of Between the Buried & Me. Not a fan of the genre, per se. But not having heard the record, can't say.

(It's kinda supposed to be funny. But sad works too. Thanks.)

Scrapple? If you mean Scrapple, you must be from Philly. Well, this is definitely OTHER Fiction. The puns almost sent me over the edge. But I liked the Wendy's packet.

Thanks. Although I can't remember if the Parousia was an inspiration here, the reader always brings a deeper level of meaning to each piece of art.

Thanks. I corrected all the typos. The misspellings in the dialogue sections are intentional. Used as representation of their dialect.

Very good, except: "the white flag that no longer meant stringent tidings" is basically a bit of nonsense.

This reminds me of something you might hear in a coffehouse with a bunch of hippies hanging on to old bongs and Leary books. While I can't judge the meaning ...

For some reason, I really enjoyed this. Spelling mistakes and all. Thank you.

Ha.

Personally, I liked your ending. It put a quick blade to a poem that could have bordered on sugary. The imagery was excellent, and simple as well, which is good. ...

Hmm, is this about a pole dancer? If it is, this is the most poetic description of it I have ever read. i don't think it's actually about a frog./ ...

YO, thanks for the replies, they were very interesting. Whille there defintely was meaning here, I can see how it might be lost in the structure of the poem. And ...

Very Sapphic (in the poetic sense). I like.

if anyone knows why the 'pre' button doesn't work for me, please let me know. thank you.

very nice. Watch colloquialisms like "tear-jerker" and "have my fun".