timeless

Hi, Lil_Pau. First impressions of your poem: Short and sweet with a defined conclusion in a separate stanza - ticks the box for me! Brilliant metaphors and similes used here, ...

Hi, ConfusingSillyLittleGirl. I found that the best part of your poem is the ending - the gradually diminishing lengths of lines is very effective, and the repetition of Strike me, ...

Hi, Nalyd. Your poem is ever so simple, with a repetitive structure, but it very cleverly conveys the under the weather emotions of the persona. I liked the consistency, and ...

Hi, VUZFEK. The title of the poem really intrigued me at first. Unfortunately, (not being deliberately mean, don't take this the wrong way please!) but the poem was a slight ...

Hi, erratik_statik. On first impressions, the language you use is perfectly suited to the tone of your poem. I especially loved this bit: Wishing, waiting, hoping, praying, dreaming of a ...

Hi, Explosive_Pen. Your poem is very nostalgic and dynamic in its own special way. I like it. *smiles* My comments are in bold: We walk on the narrow curb, Holding ...

Hi, LlamaDuck. Firstly, I loved the title of the poem! It's what drew me into reading the poem in the first place. The poem is full of simple and graceful ...

Hi, fragile_heart. I absolutely love this piece because of its sincerity; it speaks the truth straight from the depths of the heart. The language is simple and matter-of-fact, but conveys ...

Hi, desmerize1819. You've written a beautiful poem which perfectly encapsulates those times when we feel a little under the weather, so to speak, and the longing for that bit of ...

Hi, thefireinmeisJC. I particularly enjoyed the first section to this piece, especially this wonderful metaphor: His smile was as long as the Mississippi river... However, perhaps the second part to ...