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Hello there. :) I think everyone already did every mistakes I could find, so let's move on with the story! It was beautifully written, like always. You've got a way ...

Here for a final review! For the nitpicks, Navita pretty much did them all, so I'm going to stay clear of them this time. The end of the story was... ...

Hi again. :) “Are those them?” This sentence is a little bit confusing. Are these your shoes? is maybe a more suitable sentence. That's pretty much it, everyone else did ...

Hi there, I'm here again for another review. :) She feels stupid for leaving her shoes, but she has nowhere to go, so she doesn't worry about it too much. ...

Hi there. :) She loves art and aspires to go to art school even though her meddlesome Aunt and Uncle don’t approve . T hey think everything should be logical ...

Hi there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks, and then I'll go on with the overall impression. "Hey Ives , " He smiled . "Hey Tristan , " I laughed ...

Hi there. :) I didn't see any mistakes, congratulations! But the story... It's a little cliche, I can't lie. The little you've post is not enough to have a good ...

Hi there. :) This was well written. Not the best technical, but we could pretty much all relate to this, and that was exactly your point, I presume. By looking ...

Hi there! :) This is VERY long. Too long... I would suggest you separate it in chapters, maybe? Because when I look at that, I'm kind of on the verge ...

Hi there. :) This poem is not as bad as you think it is. I liked it. Yes, we've seen it all already, but I can't lie, it was good. ...

Hello there. :) I really liked the poem. The internal conflict was good. Even thought I do see how people could misinterpret it and think there's too people. "Just take ...

Hey there. :) I don't know what to say when Pink, already says it all... I'll just give out my opinion about the plot, and sorry in advance if I'm ...

Hi there, BlueAfrica That was good. I liked it. Yes it's depressing, but honestly, what isn't depressing when you're a teenager? I loved the way you wrote it. The emotions ...

Hi there. :) First off, you wrote the title wrong. Je t'aime, is the right way to write it. Believe me, you're talking to a frenchie here. :) "Je ’ ...

Hi there. :) I couldn’t help but feel that it was a sad day, not something worth celebrating at all. Putting his hands inside his jeans he leaned over the ...