thedelphinater

So far so good! I loved the imagery and all the details. I also liked how the first part of this was almost from the point of view of the ...

Um, wow. Depressing much? Anyway, pretty good, just it seems to be a little erratic. Like, you were almost trying to create a rhyme scheme or some sort of rhythm, ...

I liked this. A little darker and more depressing than what I usually read, but still good. *Gasp!* Grammar and spelling alert! A couple of misspelled words and things that ...

Generally I'm none to partial to poetry, or strict rhyme schemes for that matter, but I really liked this. I think that the rhyming actually makes it better than, I ...

This was good. I like the political satire in it. Most presidents are bad presidents. A few things quick, little nit-picky stuff. ...before too-many died. I don't think there's a ...

I thought this was good. I liked the concept and the plot so far. One thing I noticed though was that, especially in the first section, you said the names ...

I thought this was good, though I did see a lot of similarities to His Dark Materials. They both have the idea of a parent-less kid living at a university ...

I thought this was good. I liked the little environmental message in there. Just a few little things. Your rhyme scheme makes sense after the first... 4 stanzas, but its ...

Wow. This was really good. I honestly don't see why you thought it was so weak. Just one little nit-picky thing: Ladies and gentleman , it is now twelve o' ...

Yo. Few things. First, though I thought this was very good, I must agree with Wes that it is kinda emo, or at least depressing. His shriveled body was too ...

Two things: Firstly, I thought your poem was really good. I didn't see what you thought was so bad about the last verse. And secondly, poetry isn't my forte, but ...

This is probably one of the funniest Twilight based scripts I've read. I used to like Twilight, but you're so right about how tiring it's getting listening to people praise ...

Hey best friend. Now I can nitpick your work even further. Mwuhahaha! Ahem, anyway, I'm not sure if my advice and criticism is even relevant in the wonderful world of ...

I thought this was really good. I liked that it wasn't just a song, and actually had a moral and something to say. A few lines seemed a little awkward ...

I thought this was pretty good. It moved a little too fast for my taste, but that's understandable if it's a short story for a school project. I would definitely ...