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still keeps falling, not still keeps falls. You should probably not say mind-boggling so much, you could use flabergasting or confusing instead. Also, you should probably put it into poem ...

Alice felt a kniFe of fear, not a knive of fear, unless you mean knives of fear. Really good. It was slightly confusing at the beginning, and if I hadn't ...

I'm the monster in the closet, I'm the boogie man I'm not sure this last line has enough syllables to match with the other stanzas. Also, you didn't put in ...

I usually don't like creepy things, but this one I liked. Only two negative things: dried blood is brown (but maybe it wasn't dried yet, but then it wouldn't be ...

Instead of putting Zander froze in mid-sentence, you should just put Zander froze. It's already obvious that he froze mid-sentence because he didn't finish the sentence. You should probably put ...

I like how you pointed out human imperfections without being anti-humane. I think it's cool how you switched around the roles of humans and monsters; making the humans the persecuters ...

It might have been a little too short; I was just getting into it and then it was done. But that's just my opinion. It's a really really really good ...

Can't wait to read the first chapter. The first paragraph or two were a little slow and bulky, but the rest was really interesting. I'm not sure you used the ...

You feel as though all OF h****'s...... To rid ALL OF your misery, not to rid of all your misery...... Shrunken short is a little repetative Really great poem; can't ...