swax

I think this story is really good, but, where did Clara say she was going to camp half blood? Ther is nothing really leading to camp half blood. Alex draws ...

I like how descriptive this is, but what happened between the last and second to last paragraphs? I wounder if maybe you could add a little more background information.

this sounds really good! :)

this sounds really good! :)

This is really good! I wonder if you could add a little more about what happened to Na Ying during the journey. For example, if someone almost found her. I ...

very dramatic and good wrighting! I wonder if you could go in to a little more depth in telling Agatha's, Felix's and Benjamin's story and what happened before. I like ...

This is really good! I wonder if you could show not tell a little more and go in to a little more detail. I like how shows modern life and ...