summergrl13

AWWW! So sad... :.(! Anyways summergrl13 is back and she's back to correct! OKay, well, first of all I really like this piece. I have to say it is a ...

Don't get confused now Snoink. You're not a lizard; just look at your avatar, it's a pig! Clearly, candy makes people believe themselves to be lizards... but mostly it makes ...

Lol! This was a good piece, and very humorous. I don't think there's too much to crit; I was about to talk about spelling but then I realized you were ...

Hmm, it's a little different from what I'm used to but I'll take a shot at it. First, good verses and steady rhythm, but the rhyming order is a bit ...

I like it. Personally, it sounds about like an emo song (which it most likely is) and I like that kind of music. This was pretty good, especially for your ...

Nice! I applaud this piece! *applause* Yes, well back to critiquing. First of all, I want you to know that I enjoyed it, but I really think that there are ...

Wow, I really think this sounds interesting. And fortuneately, I see that I don't have to nitpick at you like Simon Cowell and feel all bad because all the other ...

I hate to be the one to burst someone's bubble but personally, it was a bit cheesy and cliche. But it doesn't mean that the story wasn't good or anything; ...

This is a great piece! I mean, wow, it just blows my mind when I read it! I love it! I don't think that you need to change anything about ...

Hmm, interesting piece. I especially liked how you notice that most people say that their first kiss 'was magical' and 'the most beautiful thing of my life', while she is ...

This is a good story so far. You really need to continue it because it's awesome even with a lot of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. I'd recommend going back ...

Yeah, the plot is nice but there's quite a few things to work on. 1. When Victor loses his job and they go to America This is just added details ...

It all sounds really angry. I see your point at trying to sound angry but it sounds like this song is heavy metal or screaming emo music. Either way it ...

Wow. Hate that guy with a passion much;)? Anyways, it was great. I enjoyed it. You went into great detail without being too deep about it and I applaude you ...

Samesies for me! You need to break this up, and it sonds a little ranty, so I would make it a little more flowy and smooth. Like, for instance, how ...