sportfreak13

Hey nice poem. i liked it alot. By the way i like its about kids. Isn't it? Its really cool. I like that you use comparison.

Nice poem, views life as a game, gods little game if you will? anyway i liked the comparison. So nice job and its good. Check out my blog people, and ...

Hmmm, sounds like he's not a very good boyfriend? Anyway, I liked it, the repetition was good, so was the way you described how you felt, very expressive. Keep writing.

Thats depressing but good, keep writing

Wow, that's a deep poem, but i liked it. Very good metaphors and words. What motivated you to write that poem? You could win, if you entered a contest with ...

Very good. I liked the golden lakes, we are dry above. It was something like that, i liked it alot. keep writing.