spiritblackwolf2705

Very good! I always wanted Bella to end up with Jacob though.

The caps on IT remind me alot of the name for the large brain in A Wrinkle In Time by Madeline L'Engle (Not sure if I spelled her name right). ...

Bigbadbear covered most of the problems but, it was stil awesome. Don't feel discouraged to make them please. ~ ♥Spirit♥

Well done! Honestly....wow...your writing keeps me guessing. Keep up the good work! P.s. One of the only reasons I get on YWS anymore is to read your stories... ~Spirit

Lol, It's okay.

Thanks everyone who has given posited feedback on this. I'm probably going to edit this tomorrow or sometime this weekend. ~Spirit

Uhh...Thanks.

Thanks people. :)

Yes, I see your point.

Thanks. About the whole there has to be signs that he is a vampire, she knows he is a vampire. She is really an assasin, sent to kill vampires, but ...

Hmm...Very nice. Full of emotion. One thing though, I think sucker puch is supposed to be sucker punch. That's really all I found, besides the confusion with Hel. Keep up ...

Really good, only mistake I saw were the there's, but those have already been pointed out. Great work. ~Spirit

Your welcome.

Also, I have not been spending much time on this website lately. I don't know why, maybe it's because I joined a new rp site....or maybe I'm getting tired of ...

Like I told Canis, I've been really busy lately, tests and all that school crud. I'm planning on working on it soon. I'm hoping to have it up before Christmas, ...