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So... I think I like it, but then I'm not sure. I feel a glimpse of something about to take shape, but the apparent attempt at an abstract work just ...

I think you definately have a story here. And you do have potential for a good voice, but there's just ONE thing holding me back from loving this; your diction ...

Okie doke, first things first. YES. You have something very interesting here, and more interesting is the fact that I don't even know what it is but that it's interesting. ...

Simple. There was nothing overwhelmingly profound about the poem, but perhaps it is the simplicity that makes it so. The thing I liked was how true this was. It was ...

I don't think you need to change anything. But then maybe I'm just bad at this whole reviewing thing. :P You don't need any flowery language. You don't need to ...

Very good :D At first I was a little reluctant to find a liking to this poem when you mentioned DC shoes [I just have a thing about certain specific ...

Whoa. Before beginning a new line of dialogue from a new person, start a new paragraph. Like this: "Hey Landon, how was your weekend?" Ireland called out as she saw ...

There's something tragically simple about this, so simple that something makes me love this very much. Which is weird. It's basic but there's something great about that. You maintain the ...

I don't get it, and by "it" I mean "it" but in regards to the reviews. This itself won't be a very effective review considering I'm not nitpicking or telling ...

I'm sorry, but I can't give a very thorough review because this is just too much like Twilight. Everything. It's just too much like Twilight. That being said, I'll try ...

I'm just going to disregard the nitpicks because, well, they're nitpicks. But ultimately I just love this piece. From a structure perspective, this was just a solid piece in my ...

I need something MOOOOAAAR. More. I need more. There isn't much here beyond "I'm too young for love." Show us, let us feel it or something. Do this in your ...

This. Is. Ridiculous. xD I completely hate the fact you incorporated math into a literary matter. But I also kind of dig it. Darn you. I can't really critique what ...

I'm not really into the whole mystery, crime scene thing, so I won't critique your story. It's obivous that the people like it. n_n I'm also really picky with future ...

I don't care about capitalization. I mean, I personally would prefer capitals but oh well. It's not my poem. But I can't see the reason why you would leave out ...