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This is an old thread, but oh well. The only thing that really bugged me was the last line Crumbles in the wind I just felt that crumbling in the ...

I really liked the play and thought the poem was ok, although reading the poem first did make the play a more interesting read!

Appreciate the crit thx.

This was a good read!

This is short and really good.

I think while reading this I thought this was a good conceptual idea, some of the lines seemed a little forced, but I thought your ending was really strong, so ...

I read all the posts that you have for this so far. I'll I can say is that you should keep going, if you haven't already! This is very good.

Just agreeing with the previous post that this reads more like prose than poetry, but saying that it is still really good prose.

I agree this poem is kinda bad, but it seems like what your going through this is necessary to get through it. Good luck with your mind

This was really good. The only two lines I didn't like were, "Since that reason and to that reason." I didn't think those two lines fit in well with your ...

I can't really say any thing more constructive than what has already been said. The imagery and your description's were very good for this type of writing and story. I ...

Cool I respect that and most of your critique was true, but I can't fully respect it if you're seriously asking that question.

As I'm new to this site, I had trouble formatting this when I tried to copy and paste it. Any suggestions?

This was good, not exactly literary, but maybe a philosophical writing?

I agree with the other posts that it read more like a poem rather than a song. I thought it started off kinda weak, but got very strong as it ...