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Good job, good job! I loved this. One problem I have throuh your whole that apparently we don't have enough connection with the characters to remember who they are. The ...

Wow, I liked this! You have some really, really great descriptions in there. I can't really identify, because my family has been camping and hiking ever since I was a ...

Hmmm...okay, I'll tell you right up front that I didn't read the whole thing. You have a lot of spelling, grammatical and punctuation issues, and I don't have time for ...

The messenger fled, wisely believing that Anull would have little hesitation taking out his frustrations on the poor messenger . Anull slammed a fist down onto the arm of his ...

Hee echo greenjay: Tumbs up! :P ancestors inform my inner sense of no grammatical mistakes, really, here...but I hear a voice! Here's one: Allay = something else. Look that word ...

Yes, I really liked this. I saw it more as a story about Ike than about George...and you say it's fictional anyway, so 'I' isn't necessarily George. He's just writing ...

Awwww...you should have her ride with Cello next time, just to see what happens. *sheepish grin* hey, I like romance. :wink: This was good. I liked all the jokes with ...

Exciting! I like the Resistance-friendly guy - Daeun? - with 'enthralling' blue eyes, just because I'm a sucker for cool guys with enthralling eyes. (example: Richard Armitage :) ) I'm ...

Lovely chapter, very lovely! I think Ianna is a little temperamental and flashy, for my taste, but she's your character, so...the only thing is, wouldn't they think it a little ...

Hmmm...while previous critiquer may be right about agents, I myself really, really like your story and think it's extremely intriguing and interesting. Some books have no action at all in ...

Ooohhh...very very nice, indeed. Rated 'R' for language, right? Or did you already rate it? I'm sorry if I missed the rating and am telling you somethig you already know. ...

Goodnes, this was incredibly refreshing, my dear! The suicide plot, and the calm way she stepped up to save him, just asking him on a date...urgh. I didn't want it ...

Hmmm...that was captivating. A very nice piece, indeed. I notice all the way through you tended to do long sentences, going on and on forever, with a lot of commas, ...

It's good! I agree, it could have been longer. The first post of a story should show us at least a bit about the character, although more can be revealed ...

Aside: er, sorry, chineyne...I'm not a moderater so you can ignore me if you like, but it's one of the rules here not to use chat-speak. We write out our ...