-
Re: Let's buy a Death Permit!
This is kind of strange but that's what makes it funny.I can see that you have an entirely original idea on your talks about a sad topic in a humorous ...
Sun Oct 14, 2012 4:06 pm -
Re: Stick Fight
I like this piece but I agree with alycat, I'm not really given much information as to why They are fighting.The fight is to fast paced you should slow it ...
Thu Aug 23, 2012 4:20 pm -
Re: Untitled? (Chapter 2)
I enjoyed reading this and it flowed had no spelling errors other than this. “You son of a bitch!” She screamed, echoing off the empty walls, and making the entire ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 5:13 pm -
Re: Shotgun Wedding on a Bus
This is kind of strange and all of the comparisons make little sense.You save paper towels and I guard kids who’ve never learned to swim.I don't' know what you're' going ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:53 pm -
Re: Death Wish
This was a great story but there were multiple errors,He saw them first as only orange blimps on the radar, but soon enough, they seemingly appeared to materialize before him. ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:47 pm -
Re: Depressed
To start this could definitely be lengthened it was kind of disappointing to have this great poem going but then it stops early on.There are no spelling errors and no ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:34 pm -
Re: it's cold where you left me
start peeling back layers in two’s and three’s and watch as the skin parts from skin, millimeters at a time. I’m like a journal, each sheet covered in yesterday’s mistakes. ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:30 pm -
Re: Broken Asylum
"Do you understand the conditions of the contract?" An elderly man asked, running a hand through his gray hair that was slicked back. He stared at the green eyed, blonde ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:20 pm -
Re: Take Me Home
Take me home, my love, to the moors and the winter sky, and lay me down beneath the heather, where the lords of old do reside and ancient stories do ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:12 pm -
Re: do you know me ??
dear people who think im' a smart freak and a dumb dork, hi I'm a dork ! and you all think you know me just cuz i like to read ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:05 pm -
Re: do you know me ??
dear people who think im' a smart freak and a dumb dork, hi I'm a dork ! and you all think you know me just cuz i like to read ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:05 pm -
Re: do you know me ??
dear people who think im' a smart freak and a dumb dork, hi I'm a dork ! and you all think you know me just cuz i like to read ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:04 pm -
Re: Merp
I cross the road in hope That I'll be noticed by you I will do whatever To have you in my grasp Even if it does mean That I will ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 3:56 pm -
Re: I never said he was kidnapped.
This made me laugh and was indeed very entertaining.There are no errors that I can see and no need to elaborate on anything.Locked Away All my worries and secrets are ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 3:47 pm -
Re: Locked Away
Locked Away All my worries and secrets are locked away. I still have the key. Will I unlock them and let them cloud my mind? Or Will I keep them ...
Sun Jun 24, 2012 3:37 pm
