smorgishborg

Hallways make echos long and thin like they haven't eaten or been drunken in days. You're looking for a more detailed word than "echos" in the first line. Echos of ...

If you're going to do 'love at first sight', you're going to need to put a lot more into it than this. When we first met, time stopped. sounds stopped. ...

Either very good poetry or horrendous poetry will bring me out of the woodwork, and I think you know enough about yourself to figure out which one this is. This ...

Dost thou know the difference, my boy, between a bitter fool and a sweet fool? Intended or not, Shakespeare will be mentioned. But first the little things; The Fool Motley ...

"It represents insanity. When the fire slowly eats away at your brain." How do you expect honest reviews after you spoil the point of your poem? If your poem accurately ...

This is exactly what I'd expect from fleeting idea, without the benefit of editing. While it's wonderful that you were so inspired, next time, please spend the time to fully ...

You can hear the owls and the crickets in the traces of the wind--the same cold wind that swirls around your body and makes you huddle closer to the fire. ...

Part way there. laying foundations We are caught in that quiet space between talking and not talking "Quiet" is close. It's understated and simple, which is thematically consistent, but it ...

Sloppy and way too short. Felix Van Doren was having a good day. He’d successfully tailed his mark up Downwards Street, Change street name. down a couple alleys and made ...

Ugly, and not even remotely insightful. What is this? Perhaps I have missed some longer change in your work, but I remember you as a poet with the ear to ...

I've never been a poet, and poems with a specific structure has been stuff I've been unwilling to touch. But this trend of YWS haiku has been bothering me, because ...

Read this article in the New York Times the other day, and I've been dying to try Google Translate out. I speak decent spanish, myself. Here's what it gives me: ...

My problems with this poem are twofold; The first, it's not a good poem. It's totally devoid of imagery, plot, or language. And honestly, if you're not going for any ...

It's a short story, but consider reading Dennis Johnson's Car-Crash While Hitchhiking . Actually, don't consider reading it, EVERYONE should read it, it's a fantastic short little story. I recommend ...

This poem reaches for so many different things, and falls short on almost every one of them. I'm really not sure how that happened. Nothing in this poem matches up ...