sinistercutlass

I can't say I understand the form of this poem, or how you constructed it (I'm no poet), but I like it. It has a pleasing mixture of timeless romantic ...

This is nicely written, and very heartfelt. I understand the all-consuming longing one child might have to be near another child and go on adventures with him. I do have ...

This is insane. And brilliant. I've said it before, and I'll say it again, I really enjoy the full, swaggering character of your prose. Your characters are great. Totally memorable ...

Congratulations on finishing the novel! This was a lovely send-off for Dan. I like how he's writing it on a paper plane :) and yes, Ophelia is a lovely name. ...

This is an epic tribute to an upcoming novel - it got me quite interested in reading, or at least seeing fan-art for this story. The "glowing mushrooms and turquoise ...

I liked this. I think you (or your character) have a really original point of view, and an honest, genuine way of expressing it on paper. It really felt like ...

OK, in-line nitpicks first. "He had come running to them, half-dead and hunted, and now he was playing with his words and being unhelpful rather ungratefully." I'd break this into ...

"I sit on foam in the middle of the water" - how does one sit on foam? "Once in a while, I go under water and say hi to the ...

Man, this poem just swaggers across the page (in more ways than one)! I have to say, I don't quite understand the rhyming structure. At first, it seem that you ...

OK, I have mixed, tumultuous feelings about this piece. Allow me to try and sort them out and express myself to you in a manner that is helpful and beneficial ...

Oooooh, I like this! This is a perfect, timeless nursery rhyme... with a sinister, dark undertone. This appeals to children in its rhythm and melody, and to adults for this ...

This is a great piece: well-structured, emotionally relate-able, and very relevant to me and loads of people. That last line is a rallying cry. I think Pink Floyd would approve ...

WOAH. You conjure images like a magician. The first stanza/verse is like quicksand, dragging the reader in by the strength of the speaker's personality. I'm imagining this as a love ...

You have some well-described creatures here: the scrabbling of Noctua's claws, the swishing tails, etc. Do you have some images of these creatures? I loved that description of the geyser ...