shusher

The case of you talking about the world the whole time is a bit unclear. Keep in mind your point of view when writing. It's a really great work, and ...

Wow! Thank you so much! I"ll take a look at all this today.

Your character starts off fighting herself, so it seems. Description is needed. Thought i'd let you know

I guess I have to read the prologue first, but I would recommend, when starting a new chapter, to not use pronouns in reference to a character. If having a ...

i accidentally submitted the same message twice, and so had to delete the second one, but needed something to replace it. Well, here you go. Fish don't have dry humor.

Yes sir!

Thank you so much for the encouragement!

Thanks for the feedback. The book sounds really interesting! Let me know if ever you remember its name.

Honestly, this is so helpful! I needed this comment!

Alright I hear you. Sorry I responded aggressively I was just a little taken back by the fierceness of your comment.

How does one get better without creating an utter flop? To help you out though, this, just like anything I write... ever... was experimental. The curiosity/inspiration for this one was ...

I want to create something with rhythmic power to interest the reader, but none of it relatable to the reader. Would you happen to have a reference for this? Thanks ...

I appreciate the advice. The reason for these characters lack of depth was because... they're completely unimportant to the entire rest of the story... which will happen... eventually. Plot is ...

I don't know. lol

'someday' implies long term, and 'soon' implies short term. You seperate the two words with a comma in between them. Thus, the wording seems... a little off. Flawed diction: Mmm... ...