scribblingquill

i love this. Its beautiful. I havent read the others.

brilliant. truthful, honest, and simple without being clumsy. Well done. i kind of love this.

l love this heart beat on the insides of your wrists. You are alive and delicate and insecure and I love you I have a couple of ideas of what ...

you did ^_^ though it has to be a rhyming couplet, not a last verse. but yes! thank you! ^^

language is a bit clumsy at points, but very nice ending, good twist. Work on it and it could be brilliant.

her heart doesn't beat, hence no pounding. but cute ^^

damn good boy well done

feet ARE small children!! :O

I like the way you didn't use full rhyme, it was much more subtle. I like the "fading limelight" part, and I think i understand your point but I'd try ...

i understand this is long, and the structure gets a bit repetitive. Obviously its more interesting to me, as i can see how it relates to me and my life ...

the last lines of speech are brilliant and powerful, and i love how its tied in with the lady Luck part earlier on, it really adds a lot more meaning ...

"i don't understand Who i am yet i know Everything about me" those lines really stood out to me as relatable and meaningful, however i'd say the rest of it ...

you made a really good flowing poem and effortless rhyme structure out of a very simple, and i'd say quite boring topic. Well done. I'd like to see something you'd ...

i wondered why your poems are in brackets. well i say wonderED. but i still am. O.o

simple, but surprisingly not cliche or boring. i tire of first time writer's clumsy words. these were a nice change :)