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Heya, So yes, I did enjoy this piece but in the coming chapter there are definitely some things you can do to improve your writing. Don't get me wrong, this ...

Hey ROD, I like the intense way you describe what's going on in this story, but there is some room for improvement in how you help convey what's happening to ...

Hi Gaiya! I'm Scout :) This is really interesting, and like Mia Paramore, I was really intrigued to know more about Africa! You only have a little so far (I ...

Hi Munchkin, I liked the way this piece was put together, and I also have some helpful critiques. First of all, the plot line was interesting, but I do have ...

Hello Lady Purple! This is thematically an okay piece, but you need to do more! Right now you have more of a vignette than a short story, so expand on ...

Its a horror story alright, a little gruesome and gory but pretty well done. You have some good visions, but a tough time making them realistic and come out sounding ...

Hi brokenmemo, I have to agree in that this is a really cool idea, but I hate to say that the whole "kept in a laboratory by evil men and ...

Hello Angel, This work was great! I liked the length, the tone and style, and the overall rhythm of the piece. Maybe think of adding a little more about your ...

I really did enjoy the perspective you took up in this piece. It is very rare and unique to write from the point of view of the typical antagonist in ...

Hi Marbel, I did enjoy this story but I have to agree with Lycando that it is a little unoriginal. However, you did a good job anyway. I loved the ...