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Re: Thirst
Hey Diane and on behalf of... well, myself, I would like to welcome you to YWS! You can call me Stella, and I shall be your critiquer this afternoon. I. ...
Aug 11, 2008 -
Re: Looking at myself
I loved the anger and feeling in this piece, and it was well-written, but it still needs a lot of revising. I dug my arm with my nails, Pulling hard ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Thirst
... Crits? I may be harsh. The way you write doesn't flow. Typos everywhere and it's just not smooth. Your descriptions are pretty point blank. Your grammar is lacking, and ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: lost in death
I thought it was really good^-^ Rhyming poems we're my least favorites but....your poem made me like these kind of poems XD thanks
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Someone cold as you
Drip! Drop! Drip drop! [clever hook] It's raining I thought to myself [thoughts are usually put in quotations but maybe you ignored this purposely? But I've also seen it without ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Someone cold as you
Welcome to the YWS! If You have any questions about the site or need help finding something, feel free to PM me. First of all, you haven't done any reviews, ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: Someone cold as you
even if you do it's doesn’t change the minds of others it doesn’t change my mind either because you This part got me a little confused. I've no idea what ...
Aug 9, 2008 -
Re: I've Come So Far
I have to agree on the 1st comment but over all good :smile:
Aug 7, 2008