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Haha wow I loved that. I'm sorta hungry now. But wow that was witty and funny, and I've never really read anything like that. Smart =)

Too much talking, but not enough details. But I love the story, great foundation and great story line. I really like your characters and Maddie's need for him. Makes me ...

Hey there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression. How many times have I ran down this trail? Too many times to count, ...

I thought it was great, a little grammar blah blah blah but you know what I think you have a good foundation for a great story =) I can't wait ...

I thought it was really good. A few grammer and spelling errors but i thought it was brilliant. Your writing style is good, solid. I'd like to see a little ...

Your main characters seems lost, in more ways then one but i think she's supposed to be right? I'm excited to read more =) I think you have a good ...

I don't know why, but it made me really sad. I think it's because it reminds me of my faliure. Weird, i know =)

I really liked it, it went kinda fast, there was a lot of dialouge which wasn't needed, like ordering the pizza. but everything else was great. Dont't doubt yourself, keep ...

This seemed like it was taken out of story, not poetry. Maybe you should try writing a story instead =)

Im sorry but i didn't get it. I mean you have a way with your words, I just was... confussed. I didn't reallyget what was going on or what the ...

Thanks a lot! I know my grammar and spelling is great but i always leave that till my story is complete. I always write first, edit later. But thanks so ...

Just so everyone knows, I will be posting more tonight. Probably in a few hours so i hope i get lots of reviews!

Thanks! I'll probably post two more chapters tonight, maybe three! So stayed tuned.

I found there was to much dialouge, it got kinda boring. Um, Okay try to join things together or cut some out. Get to the point, but ease into it. ...

wow wow wow. it was kinda short, i needed more. but it does show promise. but first and for most it needs alittle bit of order. some structure some formatting! ...