rosethorn

I have never been the subject of a poem, at least not that I know of. So because of this fact alone, perhaps I'm biased in my opinions. Actually, I ...

OK! Now that we've got past all the "Don't do _____________!", let's get to business shall we? Poetry critique is rarely, if ever, based on fact. It's all a matter ...

This does nothing for me whatsoever. Poetry is not taking a strong emotion like hate and turning it into a random insignificant list of sentences. It's a little more of ...

Welcome to YWS. This isn't peotry, of course. So use proper punctuation. I'm sure it's not news to you that the beginning of every sentence should be capalatized. I don't ...

As previously said, the imagery is very strong. (I feel as if one could never hear a compliment too many times.) Since the focus on imagery is so strong, you ...

This is a list, and a shameful one at that. Has as much essence as a grocery list might. Which is ironic considering the topic at hand. I agree with ...

This is the sort of work that gets published nowadays. And it doesn't only get published, it sells. Your style is very real and relatible. Even the structure of the ...

This was hoplessly entertaining, as childish as it was. You write as if you are talking directly to someone you know very well. A few grammatical errors and misspellings caught ...

Probably only my third or fourth time reading narrative poetry. I really liked this a lot, Claudette. It's a very sad story and you express it well. It's not as ...

Agreed. Top half seems nice enough. But as soon as "bitches" comes in, it sort of just lost my attention. It gives off a feel of junior high kid stuff. ...

There is really nothing to this piece. No relevance, no connections. Just some words put into lines. You can't fairly call this poetry. Is there any message at all here? ...

It's a great beginning and I was inticed by it. It's creepy and interesting. You've done a good job describing your characters and giving them life. Everything as far as ...

It always catches up with you, nomather what. Bit of a typo, I presume. As it is, it sounds like our narrator is missing two front teeth. Well, you are ...

Whatever inspired you to write this piece...catch that and keep it as a muse. This is like masterpiece and it paints itself as I read it. This is a very ...

Well, it's definetly strange, but I expected no less from you. :wink: I found your seemingly random capatalization to be very interesting. And yet I know it serves some purpose...You ...