roostangarar

The set-up to this was great. I really got sucked into the story, Charlie not understanding (or refusing to understand) that her sister wasn't going to make it, the move ...

I like the premise, it's interesting and surprisingly well thought out. Your grammar and spelling need some work though, I'm not sure if you were rushing through this or just ...

This was really good, very thought provoking. I couldn't pick up on any grammatical or spelling errors and it flowed very nicely all the way through. Your descriptions were perfect, ...

This was very engaging, I really felt myself get drawn in by it! There were a few grammatical/spelling errors, but nothing major enough to distract me from the story. I ...

I had absolutely no idea that that was coming. Truly shocked me. Well done, that hasn't happened for a while. The only thing I didn't understand was how a stick ...

Nightfall~ Prologue In contrast to what lili said, this is not good. I would even go so far as to say it is terrible. It reads clunkily, with very little ...

I like it. It's emotive, your language is good and I can't fault your grammar or spelling. I could really feel Mayflower's (I assume that's the name of the protagonist) ...

I watched as the last UNSC ship left Reach... The planet had been destroyed by the Covenant, and I was the only one left alive. The last spartan ... I ...

I noticed several grammatical errors and some unnecessary full-stops. I hope you proof read the story before you post it, or it'll actually be worse than a lack of Smash ...

As with the people above, it was truly excellent. The start of it totally drew me in like nothing else I have ever read. I genuinely could not find a ...

I am going to nitpick this. Statement of fact. I will be harsh. Another one. THIS IS HILARIOUS!!. Last one. Level 1 : Press Start Jay did spend the night ...

I don't think there's much I can say that hasn't already been mentioned by someone else. It is a good story, but still has a few spelling and grammatical errors ...

I don't know if I hate you or love you right now. Yes this piece is incredible. But it's going to be an absolute nightmare to review because it's so ...

Okay, this is quite good. You're a reasonable talented writer from what I picked up, but I noticed that you've been comma splicing. You've used (roughly) a comma for every ...

Once again, an excellent piece. There are a couple little typo's here and there, but nothing too major. However, Erick's speech seems kind of rushed, and he changes from confidant ...