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First things first. This is very good. I loved the way you told the story, and it left me wanting to find out what happens to Addison. There was one ...

I'm so intrigued! This is a fantastic start to what looks like a very promising and interesting story line! Overall you did a very good job! While reading I had ...

This was incredibly good. The idea that you are going for is unique and creative. I sincerely hope that you are planning to write more with this idea, as I ...

By the last paragraph I had goose bumps, and when I got to the last sentence I cried. This is very well written and the idea flowed nicely, like you ...

The details of the problem your character is facing is very relatable. Many of us have been here facing problems very similar to this. Although the piece is overdramatic, I ...

The vividness of your descriptions left me speechless. I feel like I was actually there in the room with the Professor. I almost think that you could turn this into ...

This made me really emotional. But in a good way. Alright I apologize for the following English teacher that follows and reads into symbolism... I really like how almost seemed ...

Amazing piece of work! This was beautifully descriptive. Your fight scene had me on edge, rooting for a character I knew nothing about. That takes serious skill. I feel like ...

Hello! I like what you have so far. This would make a very good introduction, but for a first chapter you may want to answer a few questions readers may ...