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No, I wouldn't say that, it just could use editing and such.

Oh, okay, well that makes me feel better. I almost felt bad. You did make a strong compliment, that is for sure.

Oh my god, thank you so much. But don't give up writing! Never do a thing such as that! Especially since I liked Mermaid by you so much. But I'm ...

Aley, Thank you, you always give such good reviews! You're right, I focused on getting the sounds I wanted, and let my structure slip a bit. I can't find a ...

Thanks for the review!. I will fix "indistinct", thanks for catching that. As for the rhyming, you're right, I don't have an end rhyme. However, I do use rhymes, I ...

Oh, that makes sense! That's clever, really. Glad you explained it.

That didn't really work, it changed it to Italics. That's suppsed to show brackets w/ a lowercase i, then you write, then do brackets again with a /i inside

Oh, well to do italics, just " " and then write what you want and then " " at the end

oh yeah I did that just to draw attention to them as seperate, contrasting things. I didn't see anything in the other stanzas that needed that sort of marking.

Thanks!

Percybeth, The third stanza was meant to represent that the relationship had turned to be mostly a physical attraction, not an emotional attachment, and those are the type that tend ...

Okay, thanks! I fixed that.

Wow, thanks! I'm glad you like it. Yes, imagery was intentional, that ismy favorite retorical strategy. As for the way I structured it, I usually have much more flowing poems, ...

Haha, it's funny that you thought that cause he isn't my ex. We're just sort of in that not quite a couple stage until school starts, plus he's away for ...

Glad you liked it! If you don't mind, could you point out where you saw grammar mistakes? I couldn't find any, but I would like to fix any that are ...