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Dear magpie, This is a notice sent out by the "Poetry Rules" Association. We have sent out a dispatch to each of todays gruesomely incorrect poems. Needless to say, we ...

Crepe is also a type of paper, that's actually where the name comes from, cause the petals and bark look like crepe paper.

Thanks, it was helpful! I changed some stuff around based on your thoughts :)

I like the way you have it now. However, are the ones that aren't in italics a different voice? Maybe put those in parentheses instead of just quotations, it'll look ...

timmyjake, just for a bit of the back story, this was at a meeting for my journalism class/yearbook club. The article & photo bit was a rule the teacher was ...

Thanks, Retro, helpful and lovely review as per norm! I played around with the bit you didn't like as much, should be a bit better now. Thanks, and you have ...

Thanks as usual for a super helpful review! I do have explanations for some of the things you mentioned, though. Redflags are flown at the beaches I go to whenever ...

Yeah, I broke that in half on purpose, because it's the word breaking.

Thank you so very much! That all meant so much to me. Definite;y one of the best compliments I've ever gotten. I have tons of other poems posted here, if ...

Haha, it's ok. Glad you like it better now :)

I did leave out punctuation on purpose, because it was a poem about running, so I wanted to convey speed and exhaustion.

You got pretty close, although the focus is more on the fights the homewrecker causes. The last stanza was focusing on the tension, the "homewrecked", how it was all falling ...

thought it was a bit too similar for comfort.

Haha, thanks lovely!

Thanks, Writer, for the compliment and for the congrats :) I know it seems a bit odd, but I was going for a certain sound, and it works to repeat ...