reikann

Hello Zolen! To begin with, thanks for responding here. :) It's true - this is, for the most part, amusing to those who like dungeon delvers. I seem to recall ...

Is it that vague - probably. Is that bad - not necessarily. The problem with writing a riddle is that the one who writes it already knows the answer, and ...

Nope, the choice of mythology and setting together is not a game-killer. It's a not uncommon theme, in fact; Greek/Roman mythology can be recognized in most settings, so it feels ...

Hello! This will do better if you can separate it into individual chapters. Good luck with it!

I'll accept the king as an eccentric. Kings would tend to be, after all.

No problemo! Do do so, when you have the means. Use Green Room works; they're worth bonus points. And good luck!

'eventually' is not now, nor is it soon. 'eventually' is the idea of one day. 'eventually' is supposed to come, but it might never. And, if it wasn't clear, 'mean' ...

Hey, ah, Rehann? Is this posted in the right place?

You did deserve it, after all! Be careful not to focus solely on the praise - pride cometh before a fall - but do take it, if it comes. Good ...

Do whatever suits you, and good luck!

You're allowed to change things, you know! Just because you wrote it that way first - and that you wrote it in one shot - doesn't mean that's the way ...

Hi, Candy! Thanks for your comment. I'd like to respectfully disagree with your assertion that because poetry plays by different rules than prose, punctuation and capitalization don't matter as much. ...

Would it be possible for you to break this up into individual chapters, as per the norm on this site? It is easier to review that way.

Nope. It wouldn't work for your poem to have one here, I think!

Wooo, magical line break meaning~! Just because you didn't mean to put them there doesn't mean they're not there! I did really like this poem, in fact, haha. I think ...