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'Ello~~~! Rawrafied here, representing team Rugido Sol on this fine Review Day! I must admit that I haven't read any of your story's previous installments, so I won't comment on ...

'Ello~~~! Rawrafied here, representing team Rugido Sol. I must admit, I have not had the pleasure of reading your previous works, so I won't comment on any of the logic. ...

'Ello~~~! Rawrafied here, representing team Rugido Sol on this fine Review Day. I must admit, I've not read any of the previous chapters, so I won't touch on any of ...

'Ello~~~! Rawrafied here, representing team Rugido Sol. I must admit that I haven't read your previous chapter, so I won't comment on any of the story logic. I'm going to ...

'Ello! Rawrafied here, representing Team Rugido Sol. I must admit that I haven't had the pleasure of reading your previous chapters, so I'll refrains from touching on story logic. I'm ...

Hiya~~~! Rawrafied here, representing Team Rugido Sol. Let me just say, your title caught my eye and I'm excited to check this piece out. I'm going to go line by ...

'Ello~~~! Rawrafied back. First, can I say I love your chapter lengths for YWS. Don't get me wrong, I love long chapters in a physical copy, but editing them aren't ...

'Ello~~~! Rawrafied here, your fellow Rugido Sol teammate. I'm going to read this line by line and pull out anything that catches my eye, okay? :3 In her Eryka's dream, ...

Hello. Rawrafied back again for Review Day. Still representing Rugido Sol. ^_^ I, unfortunately, hadn't managed to completely read your previous chapter, so I won't be able to comment on ...

'Ello, rawrafied here representing team Rugido Sol on this fine Review Day. I'm here to tackle your lovely story and shall do so by going line by line down your ...

'Ello. I'm going to go line by line and pick out anything that catches my eye, okay? :3 Her stomach twisted in knots, the sound of a breath against her ...

Here's some corrections/suggestions: His mother was white, his father was black. These are two independent sentences. Use a semi-colon to keep the quick-reading nature. To get it you have to ...

'Ello. Me again. This time representing no one on this non-Review Day. So, I probably won't be as picky (unless you want me to be) and I'm just going to ...

'Ello! I'm gonna review this by going sentence by sentence and picking things that catch my eye. Warning, I have not read any of the previous segments to this lovely ...

'Ello! Rawrafied here, representing team Royal Navy, to enjoy your lovely piece of work. I must warn that I haven't read anything prior to this point, so I won't be ...